CHAOS IN PISTON|| ACTION_FICTION TALE

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Piston was a lovely town, everyone talked about. It was known for her safety, cleanliness, availability and affordability of almost everything, until; the Prime Minister, Jayson Hopper, died of a so called; heart attack.
Just immediately, there was a change in power, then came the chaos....

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The change was drastic and rapid, nobody saw it coming. Piston moved from a lovely and safe town into the lions den. It was clear that corruption has eaten it's way into Pistons heart, but the people of piston, weren't exactly ready to give up on their home town, just because of some shit head that's in power.
Powerful and prominent men and women that loved Piston, came together and funded an Operation, which they called, WHITE FALCON..
The White Falcon, is a top secret N.G.O operation, it consists of different segments which all walked together to root out and end corruption in Piston.

The first segment consist of the I.T. They are highly trained personnels that specialize in gathering information and Intel for the second segment.
They scattered themselves into every segment of the Governmental bodies, one of them even became a P.A to the new prime ministers son, Andy McQueen.
Vital informations are mined undetected by these segment...

2nd segment consist of the Analysis and logical department, they received Intel from the I.T department, then create a well strategized plan to intercept and end, 1 corruptionist at a time, with out blowing up the entire operation....

The 3rd segment which is the most important of all segments, is the tactical team, which consist of 6 male soldiers and 4 female soldiers.
They are responsible for carrying out operations based on Analysis from the logical department...
Jack was the head of this department, he made sure he and his teammates are effective on every mission.

It's been 6 years since the WHITE FALCON was funded, and operational, they've been effectively walking their way in to root out the corruption, and as of now, they've located the source. They managed to get into the Governments system by planting a bug in the main fraim. They found a top secret classified file, with the highest level of clearance in the Government body. They copied it and hired a pro to crack its encryption. They accessed the database and found a list of every government official that is dirty and under the pay roll of the Prime Minister; Jonathan McQueen.

The logical department had a plan drafted out based on specific analysis, they sent it to the tactical team to finish the job. Jack went through it, and it was accurate, and he knew exactly the best way to get it done.

Now it's left to Jack and his teammates to finish the job.
Jack pre-briefed his teammates about the new plan, when the time was right, they are to quietly apprehend and bring everyone on that list to base, for interrogation.

The following week, they received verification to carryon with the mission.
Jack gathered his tactical team in the briefing room, their eyes fixed on the large screen displaying the list of corrupt officials. "Alright, team," Jack began, "we've got our targets. We need to move swiftly and quietly. Our objective is to apprehend each individual on this list without alerting the others."
The team reviewed the plan, nodding in agreement. They knew the stakes were high, but they were well-trained and prepared.

"Let's gear up," Jack said, his voice firm and confident. "We've got a long night ahead of us."

The team dispersed, each member checking their equipment and mentally preparing for the mission. Jack's voice echoed in their minds: "Stay sharp, stay focused. We're bringing these corrupt officials to justice, one by one."

As they set out, the city was bathed in darkness, the only sound heard, was the hum of their vehicles and the rustle of leaves beneath their feet, and by the bushes. They moved with precision, like a well oiled machine working with 100% efficiency. Each member knowing their role.

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The first target was a high-ranking official in the Department of Finance. The team surrounded the building, their eyes scanning the perimeter for any signs of security. Jack gave the signal, and they moved in, swift and silent.

The official was taken down to base without a struggle, the team secured him in a matter of minutes. They repeated this process for each target on the list, their movements choreographed to perfection.

As the night wore on, the team began to close in on the final target: Prime Minister Jonathan McQueen. Jack's team had been preparing for this moment for years, and they were determined to see it through.

The Prime Minister's mansion loomed before them, its walls fortified with layers of security. Jack's team knew they had to be precise, to avoid triggering any alarms.

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"Let's do this," Jack whispered, his eyes locked on the mansion.
With a deep breath, the team moved forward, their mission almost complete. The corrupt officials would soon face justice, and Piston would begin its journey toward redemption.

On this ground, Jack and his teammates, snuck into the building, completely undetected. The prime minister was in his bedroom trying to catch some sleep when suddenly, a silent alarm was triggered. Just immediately, security swooped in, surrounding Jack and his teammates.
Jack and his teammates lost their element of surprise, they knew the prime minister would be escaping through his roof top, so they began to fight..
They sent signal to their base, alerting them of the new development and they should proceed with plan B.
Jack and his teammates managed to put down the security guys with out killing any of them, but it was too late for them to get to the 44th floor on time to capture the prime minister, they hoped that plan B goes well, or they risk loosing their chances of apprehending the prime minister.

The prime minister and two of his most trusted guards made it up to the rooftop, they already sent a distress alert and requested a helicopter to pick up the prime minister.

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They stood there on the rooftop waiting for the chopper to arrive, the security guards secured the door, making sure Jack and his teammates doesn't come through it.
A little bit later, the chopper came, and the prime minister and his guards hopped on and they took off.

What took you guys so long, take us as far away from here as you can, the prime minister said as they flew away...
Jack and his teammates were instructed to get back to base, then the moved out, quickly before the cops arrived..
The co pilot used tranquilizers to subdue the prime ministers personal guards, and then secured the prime minister, then took him to base..

The prime minister was surprised, he asked them how they managed to get to him, they laughed and said to him; You don't mess with the white falcons, we intercepted the actual pilot and put him to sleep, then we took the chopper and picked you up.

Now there will be no more asking of questions from you, the chief interrogation officer said while walking into his interrogation room.

Now this is the white falcons game plan, their very final move, which was to get the prime minister to freely confess to his sins, without hurting him physically. They have already programmed a hyper-realistic visual stimulator to help soften things up.
This program was specifically designed to break the strongest will of a person. The plan was clear, a person in Jonathan McQueens current condition, should likely have his strongest will, devoted to keeping the truth hidden at all cost, he must have vowed to say nothing about the truth, even though he was being physically tortured, the truth must be concealed at all cost. This was the analysis the logical department came up with. If ever the prime ministers strongest will, fails to be to hide his secrets, concerning the government, then their plan fails woefully.

This made the stimulators Job easy and direct. They put the prime minister inside the stimulator and in no distant time, the stimulator beeped showing it has completed its task.
Now the prime minister is vulnerable for about 60 minutes, any question you asked him that goes in line with his strongest will, he would give you a straight and honest answer, willingly and fully aware of it.
So they filmed him and asked him questions about the corruption in the entire piston, and boom, Jonathan McQueen began to confess to all his criminal activities. The logical department has once again, nailed another analysis and predicted right. Jonathan McQueen confessed how he orchestrated the death of the previous minister and made it look like a heart attack, then he bribed his way into power. He confessed to everything
The confession videos of all the corrupt personalities, was anonymously leaked to a powerful journalist; Andrew Mendez.

Andrew made the story and published it. The story made the headlines and the prime minister and all his allies were arrested, most were sentenced to life imprisonment with hard labor, while the rest had less but befitting sentences.

After a while, one of the leaders of the white falcons, was made the new prime minister of Piston, her name was Felicity mongolo.
She legalized the White Falcons but kept it top secret..
She devoted her life to restoring the lost glory of Piston, and worked tirelessly towards it. The people loved her for it...

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A new dawn began in Piston, nobody knew if corruption truly died, but they really didn't care, they hoped that things would only get better, especially with a woman like Felicity mongolo in power....

         THE END...

let me know if you'd like a part 2 to this story.

ALL IMAGES WERE GENERATED USING GEMINI AI
Signing Out; CHIDDY.
#Chiddy



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Thank you @hivebuzz you're the best 😊

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That's great @chiddy! You're doing a great job on Hive! We keep cheering you on for your next goal!

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I'm gradually working my way there 😊, thanks for your support

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hello @chiddy. A few comments around your participation for this prompt that we hope you will find useful.

I can see that you enjoyed this. There is a sense of excitement in the pace of your story, although any pace that you were hoping to sustain was, unfortunately, repeatedly interrupted by the many images that you used. We often tell writers: one excellent eye-catching image is far better than a three to four ordinary ones. In your case, you threw in eleven, and two are almost identical! For this reader, it was too distracting and didn't add anything to the piece. Your images also need correct image sourcing. It is not sufficient to say they were generated by AI. You need to state which AI software you used to generate them.

Your story was almost pure narrative. You introduced many characters but did not develop any of them. There is no character that stands out. No character who experiences growth through the course of the story, and therefore it is lacking in the critical character arc. There was also very little in the way of 'show don't tell' which was the objective of this week's challenge.

We also note that you did not edit this piece and this is evidenced by spelling errors, and issues with punctuation and grammar. You are also not consistent in your use of speech marks for dialogue, capitalisation of proper nouns, and you mix your tenses. A light edit would have captured most of these issues and allowed correction before publishing, which would have resulted in a better quality presentation.

Finally, we wonder how many stories you enjoyed in The Ink Well this week, and how many you supported with meaningful comments?

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I've made the necessary and easy adjustment, the rest are factory errors that I'll have in mind when writing.y next story

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Im really good in story telling but I find expression listen or reading others and this is one of them..

Thanks for sharing boss

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I am so amazed to see this wonderful post you dropped here as well brother. It's a kind of motivated story of actionable one that makes me like as well as which to read the story again and again sir. Anyway that's a good one and do explore as well in hive.

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Wow thank you for your kind words, I'm glad you liked the 😊..
Thanks fir stopping by 💯

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