MS EARTH #240
We are ten in numbers 8 legitimate children and the other two were out of the blue but they were my siblings in a way, so after we had reach a certain age we discovered that we might die in the same place if actions were not taken and we all found a way and vanished to a different periphery which we became comfortable and adapted to and we all separated.
Yes I am "Earth" I am very curious about things and mostly act on impulse which sometimes lands me in trouble but I have this strong belief that this time around I wasn't lying to myself and that I was doing the right thing.
I took a decision to visit all my siblings starting from Mercury to Pluto. That fateful day, I took a stand that I can do this because I am Earth; an embodiment of so many things who always had an intuition about things, so I embarked on the journey to see my elder sister Mercury first. On reaching there you will be surprised that Mercury hasn't married nor have children, she had scattered everything round her house and the whole place was scary and I begin to tremble. Before now she had started getting upset about what actually brought me there, then she told me that she doesn't want me to die.She just wanted to let me know that I won't survive in the next 48 hours, therefore my curiosity started questioning her which got her more furious as she did have anger issues that she almost used the rock beside her on me, then I realise that my toes has started melting from the heat in her house, and I became distablise.
At that moment, I started contemplating where and where to go next so I can accomplish my mission. Before I could finish, my 5 toes had melted and I remembered that she told me some minutes were counting and it was remaining like an hour for my stay to elapse, then I wondered why someone enjoyed heat instead of A.C this my curiosity almost landed me in hell fire where I'm not planning to go, so I managed to move and guess where I landed? At that moment I wasn't thinking straight I just moved so I can still have some toes left to visit others; boom, I landed with my other 5 toes at Pluto's house. I lost count of how many times I gasped for air while heading down.
It was a shock to me that I was surrounded with Angels of mercy because if not, that Pluto's place was so cold I won't be speaking like this, you mean A.C Depot was where my step brother lived? You mean this guy came to stay here? Although, I got a little bit better from the heat I came from, but as the saying goes, "don't dwell in a place for too long to avoid over familiarity", in my case, I needed to leave urgently, not to avoid familiarity, but to avoid excess cold so I don't freeze to death.
It was funny to me why this my siblings love extreme places. So, I got to see my step brother Pluto after a long time and he told me he never visited Mercury, that she is too full of herself. Of course, people that come from hell are always proud. If you think I'm lying ask Satan how he fell from Heaven, that was my response to pluto. Atleast he didn't give me a panic attack, because of my belief that affliction shall not arise the second time.This gave me a notion that my brother was doing well in his abode.
So, immediately, I strolled down about 5000km only to see a big tag on a house, that's says "the all round Uranus" then I went inside and didn't find him, so I had to wait a little while before I saw him. He managed to recognise that I'm the his sister. How he recognised me is what I can't figure out because it's be long.
Guess what he said next; "I'm a very busy person Earth, don't you have any business or things keeping you going in life? What are you doing here? I learnt you visited your siblings and I was like; "how did you know? he said: "you don't know I'm a tourist and I asked within me "since when did my brother become a tourist", and he was said "life exposes us to our life purposes in life" so actually in one of my tour I saw you entering Mercury's house but I love minding my business.
I didn't know that you are the tourist itself I will be out of here soon, you can help yourself with anything.There are lots of stuff inside but you will have to spin and call the name of what ever you want and you will be served and I reasoned "what have I not seen before? Uranus, is this what you have been enjoying, what is spinning, I can spin all my life for this oo, just for me to eat? So simple!" Okay Sir you can go I will be spinning my life out here, it was after I had spin like ten times and my eyes and brain started turning as though I was in a tunnel. I remembered that there are some pleasure that will stop your pursuit in life, so I said to myself " food is powerful", I am Earth I love eating: E stands for "Eat" and E stands for "Earth" nothing spoil so to cut the long story short I almost landed myself in big trouble but atleast I was able to know why they haven't been reaching out to me since our parent passed on.
I realise that my world and their world is quite different but wasn't an excuse for them so I feel they should have taken the risk to to check up on me, but they didn't, so I told myself the bitter truth; everyone cannot be as curious as I am but I wasn't a fool this time around. Atleast, Mars and Neptune did welcome me and were I happy but I still had to go back to my house because the choice to live is my greatest goal in life.
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I would love to drop the next series of this if it's really interesting.
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Your story is playful, quirky, comedic, and fresh!! You do, however, need clearer transitions between Earth's visits to her various siblings, and your piece would benefit from an edit. Some basic editing to correct for incorrect tense shifts, grammar, punctuation, and spelling would improve the flow of the story.The story also feels undeveloped and incomplete in many respects.
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Oh thank you very much I will look into it and do better it's my first entry though.