The Intruder
Some jobs are made for certain people, then there are some people made for certain jobs. Those are the two categories every employer and employee has to choose in the period of employment.
The employee asks himself "Is this the right person for the job? and the employer wonders to himself "Is this the right job for me?"
At the onset, being a security guard for a big time bakery shop seemed like the right job for me.
I had a big build, looked menacing enough and I was naturally a night owl, plus nobody dangerous enough would come for a bakery shop... unless it's a severely cake hungry robber.
When I got the job, I suspected the only intruders I'd see were mice, but I wasn't paid well enough to deal with those so they would be let in.
Looking back, tonight was an odd day. The employer went late and he looked like he was in a rush.
"Stand firm as Always Dozz." He said to me, holding my eye contact.
"Of course sir." I replied with a salute. While he nodded, entered his car and drove out.
He had never once done that, and it made me wonder if he knew I spent the night streaming TV shows with the Free WiFi.
Despite the odd exchange the night went on uneventfully, until I heard a noise that didn't come out of the episode of Totally Spies that I was watching.
I paused my show and listened again. After a few seconds I heard it again.
A sharp muffled clank. The type that is made when a padlock has just been cut. Slowly, I dropped my phone and picked up my baton.
In the movies it always shows the security guard pointing a torch and yelling "who's there?", while that looks good on show it is highly inconvenient and simply stupid.
Firstly you're giving away your position and secondly did you really expect the intruder to answer?
All you'd do is scare him off or make him more prepared to welcome you when you go to meet him.
So, without a sound and with the darkness as my cover I creeped up to the sound of the noise and saw the chain and padlock cut cleanly on the floor.
Slowly I walked around, looking through the windows room after room, searching for the intruder.
This was what I was employed for, and I planned on doing it right. After a few minutes of silent searching, I saw him. A hooded man in the kitchen with a big bowl who nearly caught me off guard.
I spied at him from behind the door, he had turned on the fire and filled the pot with water.
One would expect a robber to go check the manager's office for money or try to steal one of the fancy equipment, yet this is the first time I'm seeing an intruder start to cook.
I watched him some more, when the water started boiling he began adding different ingredients to the pot and was chanting.
It was clear he wasn't baking, and I didn't plan on letting the cooking session get any weirder than this.
I opened the door and walked in. "Stop what you're doing right now."
He didn't stop, in fact he seemed to start chanting louder.
"Hey, didn't you hear me?" I shouted yet he still didn't regard me.
Cautiously, I held his shoulder but immediately felt disoriented. It seemed as though something in the air had shifted. My eyes were dimming, ears were ringing and the room was turning, I looked at the man in the hood to see he had finally turned to me, sporting the most hideous face ever, at that moment, I blacked out.
I woke up tied to a chair. The hooded man was stirring the pot now and still chanting, the kitchen had an eerie green glow and the smell was something that should never be in a kitchen.
"Who are you? What are you doing?" I asked, straining at the rope that tied me.
"No need to shout, the night is best enjoyed quietly." He replied coolly.
"Who I am is not important, nor is what I'm doing any of your concern. You should, in fact, be more concerned about yourself."
He dropped the spoon he was using to stir and sprinkled something else into the pot which made it have a minute explosion then changed the color of the room to purple.
He then turned to me and I could see clearer the bizarreness of his face.
Scars slashed across it with no eyebrows and flat nose. He looked like Voldemort if Voldemort wrestled with a bear.
He took a syringe and sucked up the liquid from the pot, it shines purple from the see-through syringe as he walks up to me.
"Luckily you came in just when I needed guinea pigs."
I realized he intended to inject me with whatever potion he made there and I struggled even harder with the bounds. The chair seemed to be glued to place and the rope felt like chains.
"Stop, please..." I begged.
"Help!!! He-" My voice was cut off. I screamed but not a sound was heard.
"I remember telling you that the night is best enjoyed when quiet. Don't worry, the potion isn't painful. It shouldn't be..."
He held my leg and injected it in.
"But if it does hurt, don't sweat it. Make sure to squirm and signify. After all, that's what Guinea pigs are for.
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Story written in response to @theinkwell fiction prompt.
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What a strange intruder.. I wonder what his end goal is.. 🧐
I wonder too
I was NOT prepared for this to get so dark! Started reading expecting a lighthearted tale about catching cookie thieves and ended up genuinely disturbed.
😂😂
A story I loved reading, with those touches of humor that bring smiles, along with the suspense you manage in the narrative. In the end, it leaves us with the mystery of everything that happened, wishing for a sequel to find out what happened to the guard. Very good work.
Thanks for sharing your story with us.
Excellent Thursday.
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hello @seki1, a reminder that each time a writer wishes to submit a story to the community, that we require them to read and support at least two other writers in the community, commenting meaningfully on those stories. Stories will not be curated if this element of community is missing.
So sorry about this.
The story was scheduled and I've not had time offline to read or leave meaningful comment till (right about now) as I'm getting home😂😂
I'll get on it now.
Curated them✨
This sounds like a terrible ordeal for the security guard. This a fun and suspenseful story as the consequences of his new job unravels. The opening first line is strong and immediately grabbed my attention:
I like the introspective feel of the narrator's voice. In the following sentence, I think you have it backwards:
Should it be the other way around?
The descriptions of the setting are vivid, and I'm glad you used multiple senses to do so.
It's a fast-paced story with bursts of action. One thing I caught is in the following sentence:
I know who this Harry Potter character is, but some of your readers may not be familiar with He-Who-Shall-Not-Be-Named, so it might be good to provide more context for this literary reference without ruining the humour. It's challenging!
I felt that the story kept a good pace with the action until the bitter end. I hope he managed extricate himself from the situation, but it looks like it didn't end well. 😣
Thanks for your insightful comment 😂😂.
Sadly I spare no thought for those who haven't heard about Lord Voldemort and if there are such beings who come across it, this is a great wake-up call😂.
Yes, the employee and employer were exchanged mistakenly, thanks for picking up on that.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story✨
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