In search of my origin - The Ink Well Fiction Prompt #142


In search of my origin

Ebraín is a teenager who lives with his three brothers, he is the oldest and his mother, Carmen, who works as a school teacher, recently divorced her husband. One day when he was having dinner in the dining room with his brothers and his mother, Ebraín asked her:

Mother, for what reason, I am brown and the others are white and why, my ears are different from the others?

His mother smiles and tells him.

"Remember, that in times past, when the colony, several races were mixed, the blacks, with the whites and these with the Indians, emerging from that mixture some white, black and brown people. With different physical characteristics".

After this explanation, Ebrain added:

"You do not convince me, I will continue investigating, until, I find out the origin of my phenotypic characteristics".

His mother replies:

"You can do and go wherever you want" She got up from the table a bit annoyed and retired to her bedroom.

When the vacations arrived. Ebraim asked his mother for permission to go on vacation, to a rural town called "La Soledad", where his paternal grandmother, Teresa, lives.

His mother gave him permission and he went to that village.

In the afternoon, when night was falling, he arrived at his destination.

His grandmother welcomed him warmly, served him dinner. Then she showed him where his room was. Soon after, they said goodbye and each went to his room.

The next day he got up and looked for his grandmother. She had left him a note on the table:

I'm washing clothes in the river, it's nearby, from the house."

Immediately, I took the path to the river, I could observe the immensity of the trees, which allowed me to walk under their shadows. Many wild flowers on that path, such as carnations, lilies and mushrooms, along the way, all that splendor, projected a beauty similar to a natural painting. In a short time I reached the river, it was crystal clear with big stones in it. Grandma was beating her clothes on one of them. I approached and asked her:

"Why do you do that?" she replied:

"To get the dirt off them, so they are cleaner".

I was surprised by his answer. Then I stayed in my bathing suit and dived into the river, which was not very deep and enjoyed its icy water. As soon as Grandma finished washing up, we returned home.

When we arrived she prepared a fish stew with boiled yucca. Despite her 75 years, she still had the strength and memory to do such jobs.

When we were having lunch, I asked her:

Grandma, how do you manage to stay so strong and clear-headed?

She let out a laugh and then replied:

"It's because I am Indian, I come from a very strong race, thanks to that, I keep myself in these conditions, my straight hair does not paint gray hair".

Grandmother, Teresa and her husband?

"He died shortly after giving birth to your father, who was the only child I had."

"Grandma, I came here for you to guide me and tell me To whom I came out so different from my other siblings, in terms of my color, and these ears."

Grandma answered me:

Listen well to what I am going to tell you. Many years ago, my grandmother told me that my great-grandmother was an Indian who fell in love with a Frenchman who was fleeing from a war in France. He stayed living in this town with her, they formed a home and had a daughter. They loved each other very much until they went to the afterlife.

I asked her:

What were they like?

He took me by the hand and said:

"Let's go to my room, there we will decipher that mystery".

When we got to his bedroom there was a large trunk, where he kept several objects, he extracted from there a photo album and gave it to me, we sat on his bed and began to look at the photos. In one of them there was a very beautiful woman. As the photos were in black and white, my grandmother was describing them to me, she had dark skin, straight black hair like a jet, the same color as her eyes and short stature. And this man in the picture was her husband. He was tall, white, eyes as blue as the sea, straight hair.

I didn't let her continue, interrupting her I replied:

"Grandma, he looks a lot like me, the ears are just like mine."

She replied:

"That's right, because he is your great-great-grandfather".

I could not contain my joy, I hugged her and gave her a kiss, with tears in my eyes and my voice cracking I told her:

"Thank you grandmother, you don't know what good you have done me, since I was a little boy I have thought I was an adopted son".

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ESPAÑOL

En busca de mi origen

Ebraim, es un adolescente, que vive en compañía de sus tres hermanos, él es el mayor y su madre, Carmen, que trabaja como docente en un colegio, hace poco se divorció de su marido. Un día que estaba cenando en el comedor en compañía de sus hermanos y su madre, Ebraín le preguntó:

¿Madre, por qué razón, yo soy moreno y los demás son blancos y por qué, mis orejas son diferentes a la de los demás?

Su madre sonríe y le dice:

“Recuerda, que en épocas pasadas, cuando la colonia, se mezclaron varias razas, los negros, con los blancos y estos con los indios, surgiendo de esa mezcla unas personas blancas, negras y morenas. Con diferentes características físicas”.

Luego de esta explicación, Ebraín acotó:

“No me convences, seguiré indagando, hasta, averiguar el origen de mis características fenotípicas”

Su madre le responde:

“Puedes hacer e ir donde tú quieras” Se levantó de la mesa un poco molesta y se retiró a su recámara.

Cuando llegaron las vacaciones. Ebraim le pidió permiso a su madre para ir a pasar vacaciones, a un pueblo ubicado en el medio rural denominado “La Soledad”, donde vive su abuela paterna, Teresa.

Su madre le dio- El permiso y este partió hacia ese pueblo.
En la tarde, ya cayendo la noche, llegó a su destino.
Su abuela lo recibió con mucho afecto, le sirvió la cena. Luego le indicó donde estaba su cuarto.

Al poco tiempo se despidieron y cada quien marchó a su alcoba.

Al siguiente día se levantó, buscó a la abuela. Ella le había dejado una nota sobre la mesa:

“Estoy lavando las ropas en el río, está cerca, de la casa”

Inmediatamente, tomé el camino hacia el río, pude observar la inmensidad de árboles, que me permitían caminar bajo sus sombras. Muchas flores silvestres en esa vía, como clavellinas, lirios y hongos, a lo largo del camino, todo ese esplendor, proyectaban una belleza similar a un cuadro natural. En poco tiempo llegué al río, era cristalino con grandes piedras dentro de él. La abuela, golpeaba la ropa sobre una de ellas. Me acerqué y le pregunté:

“¿Por qué haces eso?”, respondió:

“Para sacarle la tierra, de esa forma quedan más limpias”

Me sorprendió su repuesta. Luego me quedé en traje de baño y me sumergí en el río, que no era muy profundo y disfruté de sus aguas muy frías como el hielo. En cuanto la abuela terminó de lavar, regresamos a casa.

Al llegar ella preparó un guisado de pescado con yuca sancochada. A pesar de sus 75 años, todavía tenía fuerzas y memoria, para hacer esos oficios.

Cuando estábamos almorzando, le pregunté:

¿Abuela cómo has hecho para conservarte tan fuerte y con tu mente clara?

Soltó una carcajada, luego respondió:

“Es que yo soy india, vengo de una raza muy fuerte, gracias a esta, me mantengo en estas condiciones, mi pelo liso no pinta cana”.
¿Abuela, Teresa y tu esposo?

"Él se murió al poco tiempo de dar a luz a tu padre, que fue el único hijo que tuve"

“Abuela, yo vine para que me orientes y me digas. A quien yo salí tan diferente de mis demás hermanos, en cuanto a mi color, y estas orejas”.

La abuela me respondió:

Escucha bien lo que te voy a contar. Hace muchos años, mi abuela, me contó que mi bisabuela, era una india, que se enamoró, de un francés, que vino huyendo de una guerra que hubo en Francia. Él se quedó viviendo en este pueblo, con ella, formó su hogar y tuvieron una hija. Ellos se amaron mucho hasta que se fueron al más allá.

Le pregunté:

¿Cómo eran ellos?

Tomó mi mano y me dijo:

“Vamos a mi cuarto, allí descifraremos ese misterio”

Al llegar a su alcoba había un gran baúl, donde ella guardaba varios objetos, extrajo de allí un álbum de fotografía y me lo entregó, nos sentamos en su cama y comenzamos a ver las fotos. En una de ellas, Había una, mujer muy linda. Como las fotos eran en blanco y negro, mi abuela me las iba describiendo, ella era de piel, morena, pelo lacio negro como un azabache, igual al color de sus ojos. Y de estatura baja. Y este hombre en esta foto, era su esposo. Era alto, blanco, ojos azules como el mar, pelo liso.

No la deje continuar, interrumpiéndola replique:

“Abuela, él se parece mucho a mí, las orejas son iguales a las mía”

Ella me dijo:

“Así es, porque él es tu tatarabuelo”

No pude contener la alegría, la abracé y le di un beso, con lágrimas en los ojos y la voz entrecortada le dije:

“Gracias abuela, no sabes el bien que me has hecho, desde niño he pensado que soy un hijo adoptado

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It is nice to be able to know our origin, we come from many generations that preceded us, each with its particular characteristic passed on to future generations.

Thanks for sharing.
Good day.

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A lovely story of a child's confusion about his heritage being clarified through time spent with his grandmother. A nicely balanced piece. The only thing I would add is after translating with Deepl, perhaps put the English translation through Grammarly. This will pick up translation errors with pronoun genders and punctuation and will improve the final submission. As it stands, your MC's ancestors changed gender as did his grandmother. The story also switched from 3rd person narrative to first person narrative about halfway through. This detracts from a lovely piece so it is worth the effort to put your writing through the extra step.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well.

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Thank you for your comment and recommendations. I will keep them in mind for the next stories. Have a happy sunrise. Because here in Venezuela it is already dawning.

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