Not all lessons are learned at home.
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"You cannot just wake up in the morning, and the first thing you do is pick up your phone and be on it without carrying out any house chores." I heard my mom talk to my younger brother with a very loud voice.
He has made it a habit to always look for excuses to dodge house chores. I even noticed that whenever he cannot come up with excuses, he fakes illness. I cannot say if he is scared of chores or just being lazy; the whole family was on this matter, but there was no positive change. He might make amends for a day or two and go back to being what he is known for. When he manages to assist with house chores, he likes to do them very late and at a time convenient for him and him alone.
"I have never seen a child with this type of very bad behavior; you don't want to work; you only want to eat and hang out with friends. Your mom and I are trying our best," my dad added from the sitting room.
"Do you know that whichever character you display in your parent's house is the same character you will grow up with and will display the same character or even worse in another person's house and yours when you grow up?" My mom asked him
"Ohhh, mom, I said I would assist with the house chores today. Give me more time to round up what I am doing," my younger brother said.
"When? Don't you know chores like house cleaning are done in the morning just in case a guest comes knocking and your house is already clean and sparkling, you will be proud to let them in?" my mom responded.
"Oga, stand up from that place and do as you are told." I chipped in since he wouldn't hear the woman out.
"Hmmhm," Ibe murmured as he got to work.
An uncle who is a bachelor and traveling out for work called, and he asked that Ibe come live in his house and look after the house since he will be away for 3 months. My parents, without even thinking twice, accepted to let him go. Maybe that way he would get to turn a new leaf since their advice and scolding for his bad character were not getting to him.
"I cannot stay here for long; this house is too big for one man to look after. I want to come back home." Ibe kept lamenting and complaining to my mom over the phone.
"You think the house is too big for one man to maintain because you cannot find anyone to get the chores done for you while you malinger. You will stay there until he is back," mom responded and hung up.
He kept calling everyone to complain but got no support, and he was forced to deal with his problem. According to him, when he looked around and there was no one to get the chores done for him, he would be forced to drop his phone and get it done. The first few weeks were difficult for him to adapt to getting chores done before picking up his phone, but he managed to adapt to the new system, and it did help him turn a new leaf. Sometimes we don't need advice to dump our bad habits; we just need certain situations.
So good they allowed him leave the house and go out for him to be able to change. If he had not take the step of turning a new leaf he might still be thesame.
Thanks for sharing 😌
Exactly, thanks for stopping by.
Your story has an interesting point, @offia66. Ibe needed to be forced into a circumstance where he was responsible. He had little choice but to take care of the house. Your dialog is good and your piece is logically constructed.
One thing you should keep in mind is that moralizing--giving an overt statement of moral principal--is not recommended. Your last line, where you offer a lesson, does not help the story. The line before does the trick and says it all. If you wanted to strengthen that message, you could have said something like this:
The difference is, you put the lesson in Ibe's head, not your own. This is a good principal to remember for fiction and creative nonfiction stories.
Also, this story is a bit brief--572 words. Generally we expect pieces to be about 750, at least, so the themes are well developed.
Still, this was a good piece. Thank you for sharing it with us.
All corrections are duly noted, I will do better and learn more about creative writing with the community. Thanks
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