RE: Judging a book by its cover.

Hi @offia66. You have some nice writing skills. I would love to see your stories develop more, with a bit more development of your characters, and more attention to detail. This story is terrific. I really enjoyed it. But in the very first line, I was so confused because you wrote "day" instead of "dad."

We have some great articles to help budding writers like you to continue developing their skills. Be sure to check out our catalog of storytelling tips. In particular, I think you would benefit from our article on scene setting and our article on character descriptions. Your man with the tattoos is an interesting and memorable character, but the reader doesn't "see" any of the other characters, like Salome, her brother or the children.

I hope these tips are helpful!