RE: The Visionary That Got The Short Straw
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Hello @aloysiusmbaba,
You have plotted this story carefully. It holds together well. We are caught up, as we read, in Eric's struggles. Why then do you not tell us what happened in the end? Why do you keep a secret from the reader?
What did Eric decide? Readers who have stayed with you through the story deserve that answer. It is the belief of some writers that to leave an open ending is to end with an air of mystery. It's actually frustrating for readers to be denied a resolution.
This is a good story. You have our attention. That is a success. It would be an even greater success if we learned what happened to your character, Eric.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you don't mind my suggestion.
Keep writing. You have good vision and the ability to share that vision.
Thanks @agmoore for reading my story. I'm glad you found it interesting. I'm sorry I left the readers with questions at the end. Well, if you will, here it is: Eric, after having a conversation with his wife, decided to go underground for a considerable amount of time. Since Tao's vision had to be achieved at all costs, Eric decided he would go dark so he can build connections with people in high places who, with their power and influence could help him achieve that vision. His pan was to do everything to get them to believe in the vision. He was ready to sacrifice even his life to get the vision achieved.
Should I add this part to the story?
Thanks for stopping by.
You take my critique with good grace. I wouldn't make such a suggestion to someone who wouldn't understand how to go forward. It is an issue that @jayna addressed in one of her writing tips. She talks in the essay about completing an arc with a satisfying resolution.
There is no need to tack on an ending now. This critique is for future stories.
Thank you for taking the time to come up with such a creative ending.
Have a great evening.
I'm glad you loved the ending I wrote. Thanks for your constructive comment, you support means a lot. Thanks for the tip too, @agmoore.